Just a Story to share :)

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Message In A Bottle Reunited With Family


A message in a bottle found 76 years after it was thrown into the sea has been reunited with the family of the man who wrote it.

The bottle was found on a beach in New Zealand by Geoff Flood in November 2012, but had been set adrift in 1936.

Inside was a note, dated March 17, which said: "At sea. Would the finder of this bottle kindly forward this note, where found, date, to undermentioned address."

Underneath the note was written the name: "H E Hillbrick, 72, Richmond Street, Leederville, Western Australia".

The message had been written on headed paper bearing the mark of the shipping company P&O and the ship's name SS Strathnaver.

Mr Flood had been out for a walk on Ninety Mile Beach at the top end of New Zealand's North Island when he made the discovery.

He told local media he was astonished and quickly decided to find out how the bottle had got there.

He said: "As I picked it up and started looking, I could see it was an old envelope with P&O on it and I thought this might be something special.

"There was a bit of mad panic to carefully extract it. I carefully cut a couple of bits of wire and quietly wound it up with the bits of wire so we didn't damage it.

"[I thought] Who knows where it's been. How many times around the world, you just wouldn't know, would you?"

It took him a couple of months to find the sender, who turned out to be a man called Herbert Ernest Hillbrick.

Sadly, Mr Hillbrick had died in the 1940s, but further investigation led Mr Flood to Herbert's grandson Peter Hillbrick, who was living in Perth, Western Australia.

Peter Hillbrick, who was also amazed by the discovery, said: "For this one to be floating around in the ocean for 76 years and just all of a sudden pop up in New Zealand. Where has it been? What story is it going to tell?"

His only theory was that his grandfather had dropped it into the sea during a P&O cruise. His family still have photos that Herbert and his wife Ethel took on board the ship.

The SS Strathnaver was a British Royal Mail Ship that carried people between England and Australia, but which also travelled between ports Down Under at the time.

He said that because his grandfather had died so many years ago, he had never got to know him so was delighted another link had turned up.

"The only connection I have with Grandfather is now that bottle. That's about all. So, it's a fascinating story," he said.

Mr Hillbrick has decided to donate the bottle to a maritime museum in New Zealand.

TOP NEWS #

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“Rabbit abusing girl” uses videos of abusing and killing animals to make money

Recently, a video of a woman abusing a rabbit appeared on this website, with the rabbit-abusing woman’s actions arousing the intense anger amongst netizens. This video has already been viewed over 5 million times, with over a hundred pages of comments by netizens one after another demanding that the woman’s identity be investigated. This incident first appeared on Mop in a post made by a netizen named “ＳevＥn” on November 14th (over 500,000 views that day, now over 1.7 million views), becoming the hottest post of that day, then being reposted on Tianya and other major internet discussion forums, arousing the intense attention of netizens!

The video is 4 minutes and 9 second long in total. In the video, several little white rabbits are locked in a metal cage in the corner. Then, an approximately 20-year-old young girl wearing white takes out a rabbit from the cage, first kissing it, then holding the little rabbit closely while facing the camera saying “hello”. Following, the girl lifts the little rabbit high and then suddenly throws the little rabbit onto the desk. After a little white, the young girl again holds the little rabbit closely, stroking it affectionately, then puts it into her pocket, walking and swaying back and forth, mumbling/singing. Afterward, the girl picks up a thick plate of glass, makes a face, and puts it on top of the little rabbit. Here, the little rabbit’s body is already a little deformed, its four limbs struggling. However, the little rabbits struggles doesn’t illicit any sympathy from the girl, and instead, she sits her entire body on the glass plate until the little rabbit is crushed flat, its body no longer moving. As the camera rotates, we discover that there are the bodies of two more little rabbits lying on the floor.

(THESE GIRLS NEED TO BE KILLED) (- = - #)

CASE STUDY

STARSHIP TROOPERS

A group of soldier prepared to battle for their planet from an alien invasion not knowing that their enemies are far more powerful than they imagine

Johnny Rico and his motive is to destroy the entire alien army while staying alive

Act 1: In the future, human are exposed to the thread of alien invasion. A young soldier named
          Johnny just join the frontier to banish all of the aliens
Act 2: However, the alien army is far more powerful than they though it would be, and they faced
          on the tragic fact that many died in the battle

Act 3: With the lack number of soldier they overcome the nastiest alien and banish them all

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HOME ALONE
Kevin who accidentally left home alone by his family need to protects his own house from a burglar who attempt to get into the house.

Kevin and his motive is to protects himself and his home from burglars.

Act 1: Kevin left alone by his family who went far away from home, yet 2 burglar hatch a plan to
          rob Kevin house while his parents away.
Act 2: Kevin sets traps around his house to prevent the burglars to rob his house, however he ran
          out of ideas
Act 3: Just seconds before the burglars attempt to do bad thing to Kevin his mom come
          home to the rescue.

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TRANSPORTER 2 :
a special transporter named Frank has assigned to drive a rich man's boy back home safely from the terrorist clan.

Frank Martin and his motive is to get the boy to his parent safe from the terrorist who kidnap him.

Act 1: Transporter Martin has copped with his way of work, driving his important client son back
          home safely on occasional time
Act 2: But one day he had a big obstacle which are terrorist who find their way to kidnapped the
          boy
Act 3: With his professionalism he rescue the boy and drive him back home from the terrorist hand

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MEN IN BLACK :
a newly recruited special agent must fight a great alien who want to destroy planet earth, while himself is facing a hard time working on the line

Agent J and his motive is to do well in his new job and terminate alien attempt to invade the world

Act 1: new MIB secret agent named agent J must deal around his uptight partner agent K while
          learn the whole new alien game
Act 2: Having a hard time cooping around, he face a greater mission of alien invasion on the line
Act 3: With the help of his new best friend agent K, agent J terminate the alien once and for all

LESSON #1

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What makes a good story :

• The personality of characters
• Plot, and what it related to. (ex: tragic love, in relate to world war)
• Detailed narratives that enhance audience filling to the character situation
• The way that the story is told. (Flash back, part by part, progressive)

TERMS :

• Screenplay : is written work or script that is purposely made for television or film.

• Storyboard : is a set of illustration complete with an explanation that serves as a visual guideline of a screenplay.

• Plagiarism  : is an act of copying a copyrighted work
• Pitch          : it's a one sentence selling point summary 
• Genre        : refers to category of literature
• Conceptualise : form of interpreted idea or concept
• Log line     : one sentence summary
• Synopsis    : is one paragraph summary of a story
• 3 act structure : is a standard structure form for story telling, it consist of 3 parts which set-up, confrontation, and resolution.
• Set-up, Confrontation, Resolution: settings, conflicts, outcome
• Treatment : is a detailed summary of a story in prose.
• Storyline   : the development of a story from beginning to end
• Motive      : is the goal or things that need to be done by the characters
• Conflict    : is problem that is face by the character in their way to achieve his motive

ASSIGNMENT

Ben and Jerry House Watching

By

Laura Susilo

F11DM1343

Class 2C

1 Sentence Summary:

After accidentally knocks an experiment over Ben (dog) and Jerry (Mouse) find their selves stuck with their sweet home turning into a mischievous house, now they must find a way to prevent their house from breaking itself apart before their beloved professor comes home. 

Storytelling & Scriptwriting - Final Assignment 

My blog: http://f11dm1343.blogspot.sg/

Deadline: 15/10/2012

EXECUTIVE SUMMARY:

Title: Ben and Jerry House Watching

Genre: Family, Comedy, Sci-fi

Story Angle: House pets

1-Sentence Summary:

After accidentally knocks an experiment over Ben and Jerry find their selves stuck with their sweet home turning into a mischievous house, now they must find a way to prevent their house from breaking itself apart before their beloved professor comes home.

Target Audience: 20-27

Synopsis:

A dog and a rat named Ben and Jerry are pals for a life time; they lived for almost 1 year with their beloved master, professor Dean. However, when Ben accidentally knock down one of professor experiment on the ground their home sweet home is about to change. Now they must find a way to turn back their living mischievous house to become normal again before the professor come home. 

Character List:

• Key Character: Ben, Jerry and the Wicked  house
• Supporting Character: Professor Dean
• Comic Relief: -

Character Bio: 

(Key Character)

BEN – 2 years (21 years old in human age), Dwarf figure, Jack Russell dog Breed, American.

Personality/Nature: Playful, Innocent, and Careless

Likes/Dislikes:

Likes Ham / Dislike dirty laudry

Attitude: Friendly

(Key Character)

JERRY – 1 year (almost 30 in human age), White fuzzy coat, Rex Rat breed, British.

Personality/Nature: Smart, Considerate, Kind

Likes/Dislikes: Likes to read books, crazy for cheese/ Scary things

Attitude: Calm

(Key Character)

WICKED HOUSE – 50 years old human age, 2 story American house, American

Personality/Nature: Mischievous, Childlike, 

Likes/Dislikes: Likes jokes and tricks/ Cleanliness

Attitude: Childish 

RESEARCH:

• Dog Breeds
• Rat Breeds
• House Types

REFLECTION PAPER:

A good story is not only came from a good imagination but also a good way of how delivering it to the audience. No matter how old is the reader or your audience is, a simple children story could even give a big impression if you know how to deliver them right. And that’s what Mr. Walt Disney had done. Just like what Disney said “Everyone is a kid at heart, you just have to find a way to bring it out”.  

3 ACT STRUCTURE (= story map on ONE page)

ACT1 – SET UP

Key Character: Ben, Jerry, and the Wicked House

Motive – Ben and Jerry must turn their wicked house to be normal and clean again, or else both of them and their master would lose the house.

Situation: Professor Dean asks Ben and Jerry to watch the house. Then Ben knocks one of the prof. chemical and brings the house alive.

ACT2 - CONFRONTATION

Conflict / Obstacles – The Wicked House keeps playing tricks on Ben and Jerry. It goes crazy moving things around the house. 

ACT3 - RESOLUTION

Climax – The Wicked House is thinking about playing in the lab room located in the underground basement that filled with flammable chemicals. 

Outcome: Jerry found out that the Wicked House hate cleanliness. Hence they beat the house by cleaning the house room by room. 

Resolution – Professor comes home happily seeing the house is clean. Ben got praised and Jerry beats his fear.

Key Message – Go crazy when you play and Work when you need to work. 

STORYLINE: (450-500 words) – double spaced, 12 points

The story begins, in an American house in Southwest Florida. As much particularly the houses around the neighbor is ordinarily the same as one another. However, one house is about to go mischief.

On that house best friends Ben and Jerry live together for almost 1 year now. To begin with, Ben is a dwarf American Jack Russell who loves to play. Jerry on the other hand, is a British white Rex rat who loves to read books. They live together with their master Professor Dean, who is a chemical experimentalist. But today, Ben and Jerry are left alone to watch the house while Dean gone. But Dean would not left without a warning. He said.

“Both of you better behave today, because I’m only paying a visit to my friend and I’m going to be back in a while. So watch the house and keep it clean or else”.

And *VROOM-VROOOM* he goes.

Now they have to play safe guard in the house while their master is gone. Yet both of them are very bad at playing the role. They take a nap together. But suddenly out of nowhere.

*CRASH!!!*

A sound of shattered glass breaks the silence.

The sound is loud enough to wakes the two in a split of second. Ben and Jerry are pretty well stunned for more than a minute looking through the whole living room. Just when they want to take a step to check what just happened, the house starts to shakes. Both of them are panicking and run to the door thinking that it’s an earthquakes. But mysteriously all the doors and windows in the house shut down one by one. Jerry shrieks and takes a sprint; he freaks out running to the every corner in the house with tears drops from his eyes. Stuffs in the house start to float and out of nowhere the house is giggling looking at Ben and Jerry through the living room twin windows. And for a moment Jerry faints. For more than an hour they chased down bullied and teased by the house. The house starts to gets dirty and falls apart, it wants to play in the lab which is dangerous. Ben and Jerry scared that they might lost their home and make Dane mad. Then Jerry realizes that there are one section of the house hasn’t been touch and that is the bathroom. On a sudden bright idea, Jerry shouts.

“Ben let’s clean this house, it’s afraid of cleanliness.

Then they start to clean the house with soaps, each and every room leaving no spot behind or anything else. Soon they found out one of Dean’s Chemical is spilled on the floor. At a same time Ben got caught by the house. Then Jerry go to the rescue clean the whole chemical puddle alone it almost took Ben’s life but the house is defeated and returns to normal. The house is safe and nobody got scolds, but that day Dane smells really bad.

SCRIPT

ACT1

SCENE 1 – INT – PROFESSOR DANE HOUSE LIVING ROOM – DAY

Action description – to write in narrative form, present tense

Ben and Jerry are talking in the living room. Ben laying on the floor with his stomach on top and Jerry sitting beside him reading the all-time favorite 

BEN

(Yawn)

Oh my Jerry I never thought we would be this bored, I wish Professor would actually take us with him to his friend house.

JERRY

(Looking through the book page seriously)

How would he take us with him when nobody guard or watch the house?

BEN

(Pout, Puts his head on his straight front legs while lay down)

AHhhhh, what should we do.

JERRY

(Close his book and hold it on his lap while he leans to BEN)

I’m bored to but it’s our Job to make him happy. It’s you goal right? Then how About taking a little nap?

BEN

(Close his eyes, dreams)

Prof. DANE

(Strict)

Both of you better behave today, because I’m only paying a visit to my friend and I’m going to be back in a while. So watch the house and keep it clean or else.

DISSOLVE TO:

ACT1

SCENE2 – INT – PROFESSOR DANE HOUSE LIVING ROOM – DAY

Action Description - BEN and JERRY sleeping on the living room floor, occasionally JERRY throws his body.

*CRASH*

BEN

(Shouts, and stands up)

Thief!!!

JERRY

(Stumbles from BEN body to the floor half conscious)

EH WHAT!? Wait I don’t have any 

(Grabs on BEN coat, wipes his drool)

BEN and JERRY

(Stunned, looks around the living room for a minute. Then they decide to the first step forward)

WICKED HOUSE

(Shakes around, dancing wriggle)

JERRY

(Screams)

EARTHQUAKES RUN TO THE DOOR, RUN FOR YOUR LIFE!

(Sprints from the living room to the main door)

BEN

(Runs to the main door)

The Windows and Doors in the house are all shut down BEN and JERRY lock out. The main door close in front of BEN and JERRY

JERRY

(Shrieks, Panic)

AHhhh!!

(Runs around the corners off the living room while crying)

CUT TO:

ACT2

SCENE3 – INT– PROFESSOR DANE HOUSE LIVING ROOM – DAY

Action Description – BEN barks on the floating furniture and JERRY crazily shuttles around the living room. WICKED HOUSE stares through the twin windows besides the main door, giving them smiling eyes.

WICKED HOUSE

(Girly Giggles)

Let’s play shall we?

JERRY

(Eyes roll back and faint)

WICKED HOUSE

(Tries to catch JERRY with long rug as an arm)

BEN

(Picks jerry up with his mouth)

JERRY wakes up will you!!!

(Dodge all the WICKED HOUSE moves)

ACT3

SCENE4 – INT– PROFESSOR DANE HOUSE KITCHEN – DAY

Action Description – BEN gets away from the WICKED HOUSE, and then JERRY wakes up. Couldn’t find BEN and JERRY WICKED HOUSE starts to play on her own creating damage to the house structure.

BEN

(Cringes, worried)

What should we do the house is falling apart, it might collapse. What if the Professor comes home?

JERRY

(Holds his head with both hands)

OH MY GOD! The Professor…!!!

What should we do?!

BEN

There must be an explanation why this house suddenly came alive. We should find out why, let’s go!

WICKED HOUSE

(Peeks through the underground staircase)

Oh Goody, a secret lab

I want to play 

JERRY

(Jaw drops, points toward the WICKED HOUSE)

Oh No, BEN!!! The lab

Professor lab is dangerous

CUT TO:

ACT3

SCENE5 – INT– PROFESSOR DANE HOUSE CORIDOR – DAY

Action Description – BEN pass through the corridor to gets to the living room. JERRY gets a glance of the bathroom while carried by BEN with his mouth.

BEN

(Growls)

GRrrrr…. 

JERRY

(Shouts with both off his hand creating tunnel for his mouth)

BEN I KNOW HOW TO DEFEAT HER!!!

SHE NEVER TOUCHES THE BATHROOM…

SHE HATES CLEANLINESS…

WE SHOULD CLEAN HER…

BEN

(Takes a sharp turns to the bathroom)

JERRY

(Grabs soaps)

Let’s Clean This House Shall We?!!

CUT TO:

ACT3

SCENE6 – INT– PROFESSOR DANE HOUSE LAB ROOM– DAY

Action Description – BEN and JERRY start to clean the house room after room with the soaps. They comes upon the Professor’s Lab as their last destination

JERRY

(Finds big green spot)

Look I think a chemical is knocked to the floor and has made the house like as it is now

(Hurries scrubs the spot_)

BEN

(Block up the lab door standing in two foot)

HURRY JERRY!!!

JERRY

(Scrubbing the floor)

UHhhh!!! How should I do this?

WICKED HOUSE

(Push the door hard, she gets her rug hand in)

Come out; Come out where ever you are!

(Pulls BEN legs)

BEN

(Screams)

JERRY!!!

JERRY

(Panic and scrubs like crazy)

Oh No! Oh No! Oh No!

UGhhh!!! YES I did it!!!

WICKED HOUSE

(Shrieks)

NOooooooooooooo!!!!

DISOLVE TO:

ACT3

SCENE7 – INT– PROFESSOR DANE HOUSE FRONT YARD – DAY

Action Description – BEN and JERRY laying on the front yard, beaten up and lazying around. Then Professor DANE come home and approaches them.

Prof. DANE

(Leans down, scolding)

What are you guys doing here?

(Looks up to the clean house)

You guys did a great Job…

(Pets BEN and rubs JERRY with his finger)

The three of them walks into the house together

Prof. DANE

(Confuse)

Where all the soaps gone?